Writing Tips (Problems To Avoid )
WRITING TIPS (PROBLEMS TO AVOID )
Grammar Pattern
Warm-up
Discuss these questions with your teacher before reading.
- When writing in English for work, what do you find most difficult — grammar, vocabulary, or tone?
업무용 영어를 쓸 때 가장 어려운 것은 무엇인가요 — 문법, 어휘, 아니면 어조? - Have you ever received a business letter or email that was hard to understand because it was too wordy?
너무 장황해서 이해하기 어려운 비즈니스 서신이나 이메일을 받은 적이 있나요?
Vocabulary
Key words and expressions from the reading.
Reading
Read the passage with your teacher.
선생님과 함께 지문을 읽어보세요.
Grammar Pattern
Problems to avoid:
VERBOSITY
The English language, basically logical and easy to understand, lends itself to abuse by the verbose, or wordy, writer. In business communications particularly, never use more words than you need to explain yourself. For example, why say:
“ This contact, by its very nature, the subject matter requiring great attention to detail and utilizing significant manpower services, will not be ready for completion by the date previously agreed by both pasties.”
It would be far clearer and simpler to say:
“Because this contract is very complicated and several people need to work on it, it will net be ready for signature by date we agreed.”
CLUTTER
We want to say too much and clutter our sentences with too many ideas. To increase the number of thoughts and the length of the sentence can take the test beyond the level of understanding of the average reader. Complicated construction of sentences makes it impossible for the reader to grasp their meaning without going over them several times.
For example:
“The demolition of the old school building at 967 High Street, which has stood empty years and is now occupied by students who have already protested against the order for their eviction, will go ahead on the 1st March after having been on the schedule of the local authority’s Planning Department for some time.”
Far better to break it up thus:
“ The old building at 967 High Street will finally be demolished, after considering delay. This delay was due to the occupation of the building by students, who are protesting against an eviction order. Until his occupation, the building was empty for many years.”
REPITITION
It is best not to repeat a statement, unless it is deliberate repetition for emphasis, in which case you would say.
For example:
“ Let me repeat – this order must be completed on time.”
Similarity, try to avoid alliteration – the use of the same sound at the beginning of two or more words. This adds effect to speeches but not to letters. “ The menacing march progress proceeds at precipitous pace” is rather overdoing it in a letter.
Points to Consider
RELEVANCE
We tend not to separate the important from the trivia, which can cause confusion over the priority and validity of the subjects discussed in the communication. It comes back to planning the subject of your letter: only with some preparation will you formulate clear ideas and discard comments that have no particular relevance.
LOVE of DETAIL
Give your reader all necessary information; never assume that they already possess all the information upon which you may be basing your decision. Always explain background to your letter, without being too wordy.
For example:
“As you are probably aware, our company manufactures textiles for export to Eastern Europe. We have built up a consideration market in this part of the world and our machinery, therefore, is geared for mass production of low-cost waterproof material. For us to take on a contract of the size and nature you require would mean a great deal of re-investment in machinery. This would, naturally, push up the price of you textiles and, therefore, we must regretfully decline your business at this stage.”
NECESSITY
Do not write when it is not necessary. This may seem a rather obvious statement but many of us are guilty of writing unnecessary letters. If you area asked to acknowledge a communication then do so; if a communication you have received obviously requires an answer, then fine, go ahead. Otherwise, don’t waste time and paper.
STATE YOUR PURPOSE
Think about what you really want to say before you write it. Do not write a letter that could be ambiguous. If you want to complain then complain; do not leave the recipient with the feeling that you are not really upset about his or her transgression but just want to moan. This kind of clarity is particularly important for letters relating to the field of employment. Official letters of warning to an employee must be absolutely clear in their intent as they may be shown to a tribunal at a later date if there is any dispute about an eventual dismissal.
BE CONCISE
Present only the essential: It is possible to be polite and brief.
For example:
“Thank you for your application for the position of office manager. However internal applicant has filled the position. We wish you luck in any other applications you may make to other companies.
USE APPOPRIATE VOCABULARY
Korean Trap
Korean speakers often make this mistake in business writing.
두 가지 문제입니다. (1) 'According to'는 '~에 따르면'(출처 인용)이지 '~때문에'가 아닙니다. 이유를 나타낼 때는 'Due to' 또는 'Because of'를 사용하세요. (2) 'hope you could cooperate'보다 'would appreciate your cooperation'이 비즈니스에서 훨씬 격식 있는 표현입니다.
Discussion
Discuss these questions with your teacher after reading.
- The passage discusses "verbosity" and gives a long, complicated sentence rewritten as a short, clear one. Try the same exercise with a complex sentence from your own work. How much shorter can you make it?
본문에서 '장황함'을 다루며 긴 복잡한 문장을 짧고 명확하게 다시 쓴 예를 보여줍니다. 본인 업무의 복잡한 문장으로 같은 연습을 해보세요. 얼마나 짧게 만들 수 있나요? - The text warns about "clutter" — putting too many ideas in one sentence. Why is this particularly problematic for Korean speakers writing in English?
'어수선함' — 한 문장에 너무 많은 아이디어를 넣는 것 — 을 경고합니다. 영어로 글을 쓰는 한국어 화자에게 이것이 특히 문제가 되는 이유는 무엇인가요? - The passage says "never use more words than you need." In Korean business culture, being brief can sometimes seem rude. How do you find the right level of detail in English business writing?
'필요 이상의 단어를 사용하지 마라'고 합니다. 한국 비즈니스 문화에서는 간결함이 때로 무례하게 느껴질 수 있습니다. 영어 비즈니스 작문에서 적절한 수준의 상세함을 어떻게 찾으시나요? - Compare the "before" and "after" examples in the passage. What specific changes made the sentences clearer? Can you identify the key principles?
본문의 '수정 전'과 '수정 후' 예시를 비교하세요. 어떤 구체적인 변화가 문장을 더 명확하게 만들었나요? 핵심 원칙을 파악할 수 있나요?
Lesson Summary / 수업 요약
Today's Topic: WRITING TIPS (PROBLEMS TO AVOID )
Level: Business (BIZ)
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